~*~Username and Title: "Bebegracie" is very cutesy. That's okay, I don't mind cutesy. "The Eye Of The Storm" is not cutesy at all. It's angsty. Hmmm.-3/5.

~*~Thoughts While The Page Was Loading: That entry box is awfully narrow. As I was scrolling down: Mother of God, shoot me now.-1/5.

The Starlit-Lily Factor:

~*~Does Your Soul Shine Through? If that is your soul shining through, Grace, I'm sorry, but you could use a very long soul-cleansing retreat. Go away, far, far away, and avoid people, and sharp objects, and get yourself straightened out. Because what you showed me was full of ugliness. I'm not saying you're a bad person, just that you have let yourself get royally screwed up. To be fair, though, you met the requirements--your soul shone through. Or perhaps glowered through would be more appropriate.-27/35.

~*~Are You Observant Of Beauty? No. Maybe there were glimmers, here and there, but mostly, you've dwelt in darkness and ugliness, in a sewage tank of humanity, since you started keeping your diary. You obsess about cutting. That's not beautiful, Grace. You're deliberately hurting yourself and it's ugly. You're only given one body per lifetime, why are you abusing it so? I was horrified to see how often you did that to yourself, and how brutal you were. I'm afraid I have to mark you very low here, because there is simply no beauty in mutilation.-5/35.

Layout:

When I first saw your layout, I thought it was passably pretty. Your image is your one redeeming factor. The entry box is horribly small, I can't see the scrollbars, and having all your rings and links on one page is nothing short of tacky and hideous. I'm sorry to say that, but it is. It also makes the page slow to load. Please, for God's sake, put all your rings on one page, and put your tagboard on a separate page. The only points you're getting, I'm sorry to say, are for your image, because it's rather unique, and lovely.-5/20.

Navigation:

The navigation is horrible. I'd tell you what I would like to see fixed, but I think you need a new layout overall. I'm sorry to be harsh, but that's just my opinion, as an artist. -0/10.

Content:

~*~Your Content: I started at the first entry, and read, all the way to the index. That was because I was hoping, very hard, that you would show me some beauty, and then I could be nice here, as I knew I was going to be rough on the layout. But you disappointed me, Grace.

Almost every entry, was one of self-pity. I've read cutter-diaries before, and as much as I loathe using stereotypes, you are one of the attention-seekers. Perhaps I'm reading you wrong--though, I can only work with what you give me, and I read your entire diary--but you seem to be cutting purely so people will pay attention to you and feel sorry for you. You seem to revel in the people who pity you. You also seem to tell everyone that you cut. You whine and plead for people to help you, but you're completely unwilling to help yourself, from the sound of it. You come across as weak and "needy", a leech who wants everyone to pay attention to her, everyone to comfort her. Yet not once do you mention offering comfort to others. Perhaps that's one of your problems, Grace. Regardless of how bad your problems may be--and in truth, from what you've mentioned in your diary, they're nothing that can't be dealt with in a fairly simple manner--you should always, always be willing to comfort others. Otherwise, guess what? They won't give you anything back.

You share a lot of AIM/MSN chatlogs in your diary. That, is the most annoying thing I've ever encountered. You don't make it clear, at all, who is speaking, what's going on. Just these neverending chatlogs. Also, you're extremely vague about the things going on in your life. You just rant and cry and pity yourself, but you never tell what is actually going on. That's another thing--how can anyone give you the pity you're straining to drag out of them if they don't know why you expect their sympathies?

You write, like a child. Your diction is poor, your grammar worse, and honestly, the fact that you can't seem to write intelligently makes me even less inclined to feel sorry for you.

I apologize for being harsh--but you asked for my opinion.-10/70.

~*~Your Grammar and Spelling:...Horrible. That's all I can say.-2/10.

Extras:
Not many, but you had lots of rings, and some quizzes.-10/10.

Will I Return?

No. I'm sorry, but no.

Comments:

Open your eyes, Grace. There's so much more in the world than your petty schoolmates, and the scars on your body. Also, if you're seriously depressed, seek some help, instead of just whining about it.

Total:63/200.

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