Blueiceflame's Review January 03, 2004 @ 7:47 a.m. ~*~Username and Title: Sounds a bit generic. But, no numbers, no Internet slang, and it gives me a pretty visual. -3/5. ~*~Thoughts While The Page Was Loading: Black and red. I like. Ye gods, what's with the buttons? -3/5. The Starlit-Lily Factor: ~*~Does Your Soul Shine Through? Unless you're truly just a typical sixteen-year-old whose only thoughts are her boyfriend and what's going on in the day-to-day aspect of things, no, not really. I'm only given glimpses of who you are. You come across as rather emotional, but your writing only skims the surface of your feelings. Mostly you seem...lonely. Surrounded by friends and family, but you're lonely, because you don't seem to like yourself very much. Lonely, and you hate it, so you cling to someone who, in your mind, alleviates loneliness. -27/35. ~*~Are You Observant Of Beauty? Sort of. You see beauty in those around you, but again, you skim the surface. It's superficial beauty that you discuss. But at the same time, you seem almost blind to any beauty within yourself. You lose your self-identity when you're separated from your boyfriend, which is almost a certain sign of insecurity and immaturity. "Jeff's not here, I'm by myself, and I'm listening to Here Without You which is sad in itself. I feel ugly and I honestly believe it." Why? Why are you not able to be happy without him? -15/35. Layout: Okay. I'm glad those buttons aren't part of your actual layout. They cause me pain. Now...I like the black and red--though I wish the latter were darker. It's fairly well-laid out, though not precisely ideal for my resolution. I hate where the Previous and Next links are, I hate the link color...but we've already discussed that, haven't we? As for your image, I like the subtleties of the silvery shade of gray and the white, but I hate the words. The entry is somewhat poorly-placed; the image dominates more than it should. They depress me and agitate me. Dear Goddess Almighty, is that blood at the top? It reminds me of the cover of my copy of Stephen King's "Salem's Lot.". -11/20.Navigation: The links...are a bit painful. They are rather small. They are grouped nicely together in a wanderer-friendly box, but that dark red is rather painful. Not enough contrast, by far. You didn't get too creative with the Link faces, but, I see no shorthand, and proper capitalization, which warms my heart. Truly, it does. -5/10. Content: ~*~Your Content:Oh, boy. I started with your first entry, because from September to now isn't that long a time to have to read. I was deeply depressed by your first entry. I counted four mistakes, some Internet shorthand, and the apparent presence of that evil creature known as daylogging. I wanted to cry. But, I gamely kept on reading. You do indeed mention Jeff in every entry, and at first, I was bored out of my mind by your words. Jeff this, Jeff that, I did this today, I did that today. You have very little emotion in your first few entries and a lot of things are vague, which annoyed me. When I was first reading your "About Me" section, I was confused about why you no longer wore Jeff's class ring. Thankfully that was answered. As I continued...I started seeing more emotion. You talked, rather wistfully, about not getting to see Jeff as often as you liked, and warning bells went off in my head. It broke my heart to see how unhealthy your attachment is to him. And it is. That transmitted itself clearly as your entries progressed into October. I could actually see him sucking you dry. And you're so blind to it. That's another thing that started coming across--your peculiar brand of optimism and naïveté. I wasn't thrilled when I started off reading your diary, but you sucked me in as time progressed and your relationship started unraveling. I enjoyed reading the saga of you and Jeff, even as I wanted to cry, because I knew what was coming and it broke my heart. I nearly cried for you when he broke up with you. But at the same time, I wanted to slap you, because you were so blind to what he was doing to you.YOUR BOYFRIEND IS SCREWING YOU OVER. He's messing with your mind, sucking you dry of all your happiness, and in the end, he's going to toss you aside because there are, unfortunately, men out there who like doing that to sweet young women like yourself. Please, please get out of there. I hurt for you, because, despite what you want to tell yourself, there's a very good chance that he's going to rip your heart out. He broke up with you over an email? Was it a sexy email? Even so, he accuses you of being a jealous pyschobitch--but, according to one of your entries, he tells you that he still loves Christy? Okay, maybe it's just me, but he has no business telling you that in the first place, because that's simply unkind, and then yelling at you because you're a little insecure about your relationship. Goddess above, I hate men like that. -55/70. ~*~Your Grammar and Spelling: Not too bad. You use "ain't" quite often; you use "prolly" for "probably", "cuz", and a few other teenage-esque things that annoy me. But you capitalize; your punctuation is perfect, and for the most part your spelling is decent, and your grammar, while not perfect, is no worse than any other Southerner's. If not for the fact that I want to be a writer when I grow up and thus I'm a drill sergeant about grammar and punctuation. - 6/10. Extras: Yes, you have some quizzes, some reviews, some pictures--by the way, you're a beautiful girl. And I personally love the dark hair. It makes you look older and somehow classier. -10/10. Will I Return? Yes...I think so. Because I'm concerned about you and I want to know that you'll be okay. Please, if your relationship doesn't last...be kind to yourself. It's not your fault. It's never any one person's fault. You're a good person, just gullible and easily manipulated. Comments: I know it seems like I was a bit harsh on you. You asked for my honest opinion and I gave it to you. I actually rather like you, Miss Terra Whitney Alexzia. I hope you'll strengthen as time goes on. Brightest blessings and best wishes to you. Total: 141/200.  !~***~ ~*~!~*~ ~***~! ~*~Recently Reviewed Lilies~*~ |
Starlit-Lily Reviews is a review site that's searching Diaryland (And Diary-X) for diarists with beautiful souls. We seek those people who see the beauty in the world around them, who are open-minded and profound. Here, we are brutally honest, but we always try to see the beauty in you...  ~*~We need reviewers. Requirements? Experience with reviews--reading, receiving, or writing, it doesn't matter--, sixteen years of age or older, relatively mature, and the ability to write at LEAST one-two GOOD reviews in a week. Let Cielamara know if you're interested. Last updated: June 7th, 2004. AFI - "Days of the Phoenix" "Dreams are postcards from our subconscious, inner self to outer self, right brain trying to cross that moat to the left. Too often they come back unread: "return to sender, addressee unknown." That's a shame because it's a whole other world out there--or in here depending on your point of view." -Dennis Koenig and Jordan Budde The University of North Carolina at Asheville Omnipresent /om'·ni·PREZ·ahnt/ adj. Present in all places at the same time; ubiquitous. Layout © Cielamara. Ideas © Cielamara. Reviews © Cielamara, Laughy, Amara, and Dahlia. Do NOT steal. Karma is a bitch. |