~*~Username and Title: Your username reeks of obnoxious, shallow teenage girlhood. Your title moves. I have an almost insatiable desire to kill you already.-0/5.

~*~Thoughts While The Page Was Loading:What the hell is the teen girl squad? Is this some facet of pop culture that would make me run screaming in terror, or what? Oh no. Please tell me you're being satirical in your layout image choices...-0/5.

The Starlit-Lily Factor:

~*~Does Your Soul Shine Through?Yes, although in the first few entries, it wasn't something that jumped that jumped out at me. When you first starting writing in your diary, I felt like I was going to hurt you before I got to the end of the review. But then your writing slowly started to evolve, which impressed me, considering the short amount of time you've had it. I see in you a typical teenage girl, though sans the horribly morbid moodswings. However, there's another side to you that I really like. You seem concerned about some interesting things, such as vegetarianism, and you like to read, which impresses me. I, too, carry books with me wherever I go, and truthfully, I'm lost without them. However, you're still quite shallow and superficial in some ways. Truthfully, I'll say you have potential--but right now, you're still rather annoying. -29/35.

~*~Are You Observant Of Beauty? In the sense that I'm normally looking for in diaries, no, not really. You don't really look out into the world that much; there's not a huge amount of soul-searching in your diary. You don't really see beauty beyond that which is in the little bubble you inhabit--you see the beauty in your relationship with your twin, which I loved reading about, and you see the beauty in your family, and in your home city. However, above everything else, you have something that I have yet to actively see in almost any of the diaries I've reviewed since opening this site: confidence in yourself. That's like a rare and precious jewel to me. You might be a little arrogant at times, but nothing brightens my day more than to see a truly lovely teenage girl who actually believes in herself. Extra points for that! -37/35.

Layout:

This layout is to be commended for mostly being self-designed, and for featuring original work of the diarist. It is also to be commended for being organized. However, the images are ugly. I imagine that this will hurt your feelings, but they are unbelievably ugly. And, above all these, they reek of an asinine superficiality. It's a shame, to have such ugly images in your layout, and to not even be mocking the idea. The layout is, however, organized and tidy.8/20.

Navigation:

I once found a diary that had, for its link faces, a row of tiny Xs beneath the top image. I had no clue where those navigational links were until I accidentally hovered over the X and it changed colors--to a color that wasn't even part of the layout, I might add. Those stars should not have been used as the links themselves. Even with my resolution, they're hard to click on, and while they certainly look cute, they get on my nerves. Why don't you just let those be decorations, and use the words themselves as the links? Also, capitalize those words properly, or the Grammar Nazi is going to get you. -4/10.

Content:

~*~Your Content: I read everything, as you've not had your diary overly long, and when I started reading, I was on a mad and frenzied search for some sign of intelligent life. That being said...

In the beginning, you primarily used your diary for bragging about your exploits. It was a daylog, it was a rant, it was boring except when you said something too shallow not to be mocked. You wrote casually and freely about sex, about drugs, and other such things that would have your mother and father likely passing out in shock. You're free with your body, which worries me a little--you're apathetic about the potential harm you're doing to it. I also find it rather cynically amusing that you're a vegetarian, for your health as well as for the animals, but you smoke marijuana and have sex apparently on a semi-regular basis. I'm not judging you, it's not my position to do so. But your diary was nothing other than the rants and mutterings of a stereotyped rich party girl.

But then it began to change. Somewhere along the line, you began to show that other side of yourself. You began to show that you have a conscience, and that you have emotions. You didn't seem to do anything different, but you began to confess a bit more of your soul's deeper feelings. You show not, as most people would suspect, a whole flock of insecurities beneath the veneer of confidence, but intelligence. You show that you're compassionate, loving, fair, and strong. You show that you're capable of having deep-rooted beliefs, and that you're more in tune with yourself than most teenage girls are.

Your writing style improves, as well. You write somewhat more like an adult than a child, and while you still daylog a lot, it's with a bit more maturity than in your early entries, and it's sprinkled with more emotion. I'm quite impressed by the way you've changed and matured in such a short time, and I look forward to seeing what else you can do as time goes on and you become more comfortable with your diary.

Just do me a favor. Don't ever post AIM conversations again.-57/70.

~*~Your Grammar and Spelling:I've seen far better, but I saw nothing that made me want to threaten you with anything creative and violent. -5/10.

Extras:
Oh, quite a few! I enjoyed them all immensely, and a number of them really showed off your sense of humor. -12/10.

Will I Return?

Not right now. I think I'll return in perhaps a year or so, to see what you've become--and how you're handling the pressure of your senior year.

Comments:

Overall, not as horrid as I thought it'd be upon first viewing.

Total:152/200.

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