~*~Username and Title: Cocodancer. I am on a never-ending quest to inform the world that it is "cocoa". Yes. "Cocoa". However, your username reminds me of a box of chocolates. I like. Your title makes me think of some idealistic rapper talkin' 'bout da luv, dawg. I don't like. -3/5.

~*~Thoughts While The Page Was Loading:I heard that typing on keyboards can give you permanent muscle damage in your wrists. Thanks, Starlit-Lily Reviews. Now I'm going have arthiritis. Pink. God. I hate pink. -2/5.

The Starlit-Lily Factor:

~*~Does Your Soul Shine Through?We-ell...I'm hesitating in how to judge this. On the one hand, I feel like it does. You're very bubbly and perky and...pink. You seem like...well, this might hurt, but the typical thirteen-year-old girl. And on the other hand, I can almost sense something deeper in you. Sometimes you just wow me. And I feel like the bubbly part is an exterior and you're covering up your depression and fear sometimes. Urgh. Nothing I hate more than indecision. Let me think...you know, I'd say no. Not really.-20/35.

~*~Are You Observant Of Beauty? Quite. You're very optimistic and most of the time, quite happy. I can't tell you how lovely it is to see someone who doesn't devote their entire diary to complaints about how their life is just so hard, and no one has it as hard as they do, and blah, blah, blah...You really don't do that. You're very...excited. I'm jealous. Often I did feel as if you were covering up a different emotion - but you definitely don't take things for granted. You recognize that everything is a gift, a blessing. I don't know if it's your religion that makes you this observant, but you're certainly much more...grateful? Is that the word? Whatever it is, you're much more of it than I was at your age. -35/35.

Layout:

Do you want to kill me? It's pink. I'm sorry, I hated it the moment I saw it. I have serious issues with the color pink. Not only that, I had to adjust my screen resolution. I'm assuming you have an 800x600 screen because it was ... there was less disgusting white space. However, then your text seemed huge to me. I just can't win. Anyway, I readjusted my screen because it was driving me crazy. You know, the pink isn't exactly the problem - if it was tasteful pink that matched the picture, I could deal with it. But there's nothing in your picture that's pink except for the faded "love". You need a dark green, or a pale yellow. Something to match your picture. I didn't like that. Also, your navigation is in a box that scrolls! You've broken a cardinal rule. If you have so much navigation that it doesn't fit, make the box bigger. Don't...And did all your text have to be bold? How disgusting! Urgh. I will not dignify this. Anyway, it irked me so much that I took the code and messed with it a bit. I kept in mind your screen resolution and came up with this. I hope you don't mind. I really feel like that layout suits your diary much better - at times you're very deep and your layout just screams: "I'm thirteen, love Britney, am a good Christian girl, and, like, wow!" Shoot me in the head, would you? The one I made seems like it has a softer feel...still religious, yet more mature. Reflects your writing a bit more. I'm giving you a couple a points because I had fun playing around with your code. If you're interested in it, let me know. If I'm being presumptous - sorry. Anyway, bottom line - I hated it. - 2/20.

Navigation:

As I said - in a box with a scroll. Ew. Also, you hid your older archives. I just assumed you had none - took me a while to notice. Might want to fix that. -3/10.

Content:

~*~Your Content: I...read. Quite honestly, I'm a lazy person and don't want to bother figuring out where I started and stopped. But it was a lot.

You're thirteen, Lyndsey. That means you've got points against you before the game even begins. You haven't had the life experience to be deep. And you have people like me, patronizing and condescending, thinking we're so cool because we're a mere three years older than you. However. I do remember being thirteen - quite well actually.

Actually, you remind me a lot of myself at that age. I, too, was very religious at that age - I changed, but that's beside the point. I probably would have picked out a layout like yours, though without the *shudder* pink. A lot of what I wrote would be like yours. It was kind of nice to see that.

I am so happy, by the way, that you moved on from the netspeak you had in your entries in 2002. I would have slaughtered you had you still talked like that. But you matured. And your writing got much deeper. And you stopped ending your entries with "-Lyndz", which is so cutesy it might make me puke.

Your writing...it can get very dayloggy at times. I don't know you. So a lot of the things in there didn't make me think, didn't make me ponder. It was very "tell not show", so to speak. However, sometimes...you can be so poetic. Like here. This was just...so beautiful. Your writing was very touching, and I can really relate. "I wait by the phone just to hear his voice. I get overwhelmed with a feeling of excitement when my computer "moos", and he gets on. My stomach still gets butterflies when I see him walking down the hall smiling." I hope this always happens to you. The greatest thing is to love and be loved in return. I think you and I are in the same boat in a lot of ways. Both of us are in love...and both of us, if I may venture a guess, battle daily with people who say you can't find love till you're at least in college. If you're sure this is the real thing, if Sean is really "The One", hold on tight, Lyndsey. Hold on tight, and never let go. Because that kind of thing doesn't come along very often.

I loved this. The imagery is phenomenal. And this is so deep. I didn't expect it, wouldn't expect it, from someone your age. But that was so wise.

As for all the religion - it turned me off a bit. I understand that you love Jesus as your Lord and Savior, but...I don't. And it got quite boring to read after a while. Especially because I'm in a rocky patch, faith-wise, nowadays. So your entries just...added insult to injury, so to speak. But you don't write for anyone else - you write for yourself. And I respect that.

So, I'm torn. Because you have amazing, phenomenal entries - and yet, you have as many boring, run-of-the-mill daylogs that make me yawn. I hope your score reflected both. -50/70.

~*~Your Grammar and Spelling: It was okay. A few errors here and there. Dear God, girl, use some paragraph breaks! I can't stand reading one long block of text! -4/10.

Extras:
Yup. You didn't finish your 100 Things. And you didn't put spaces in the last 30 or so. Do that. -9/10.

Will I Return?

Maybe in a few years when you've grown some if you still have it. But not now, probably not.

Comments:

You didn't link us properly. I'm taking away points. That's why it's good to be a reviewer. I honestly feel like your diary was good - but it just wasn't for me, a lot of the time.

Total: 120/200.

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