>~*~Username and Title: Oh, no. A username with numbers. I loathe those. They represent the presence of an uncreative mind. "Angel From Above"? Clichés incoming...-2/5.

~*~Thoughts While The Page Was Loading: White...and brown. Interesting. Oh, Goddess, that Tag Board looks horrible. What? She has a music player? And it's interrupting my song? -1/5.

The Starlit-Lily Factor:

~*~Does Your Soul Shine Through? ...Not really. You daylog with a vengeance. How am I, a poor little reviewer, supposed to be able to determine anything about you if you only write about what you do from day-to-day and, "OMG, how much i like some1!!!!111". You come across as frivolous and, truthfully, asinine. I had no idea how shallow a diary could truly be. I'm only giving you points because you do admit, fairly openly, how you feel about certain guys. But that is it. Are all fifteen-year-olds so completely without substance or sense? -5/35.

~*~Are You Observant Of Beauty? If you are, I can't tell. I was hoping, against all hope, that your horrid Internet slang and spelling that was so bad it made me twitch would hide some profound, moving thoughts...but you disappointed me, Shannon. Your diary is about as deep and moving as a raindrop on a pumice stone. I mean, you said, "Haha trucker hats ARE THE SHIT!!" This is painful for me. Truly painful. I think I saw maybe...three entries, that actually had some meaning to them?-7/35.

Layout:

Your layout was relatively user-friendly. I hated the music player. If you take heed of anything in this review, please get rid of that music player. Most people have different tastes in music and would really prefer their own music. It doesn't even say who the artist is. Your links are well-placed...the colors are decent...the About Me section on the entry page is okay. It occupies space. You should consider tweaking your table measurments so that the entry page doesn't just scroll on and on and on, leaving that huge empty space. Also...you desperately need to change your TagBoard colors, and your Guestbook colors, to reflect your layout. They clash beyond my ability to describe them.-9/20.

Navigation:

Your links are good. Your links made me happy, actually. You could organize your Extras a little better. -8/10.

Content:

~*~Your Content: I started on your first entry in September, because I don't especially like reading months and months of entries. Your content...is...meaningless to anyone who doesn't know you. I tried my best to step into your shoes, to use my natural empathy in your favor, to understand where you're coming from...but I just can't. You write about day-to-day stuff like that's all there is in the world. Not once do you mention anything that doesn't pertain to your little world. That's sad. You seem as though you have potential.

Ever so often you'll mention your dreams. You want to be a writer. Those words are heartwaming, because, as a published poet, and eventually-to-be-published novelist, I have a healthy respect for those who aspire to literary greatness. However, Shannon, here're a secret. You have to throw your soul out of your body and onto the paper when you write, even when you're writing in your diary. You don't. Your soul is nowhere to be found. If I didn't have such faith in the goodness and depth of humanity, I would willingly believe you were an empty-headed teenager with nothing to do but gossip in your diary about what your classmates are up to. Honestly. That's all I saw you talking about. I even went back and read some random entries in April, May and June, in hopes that maybe you'd just fizzled out of depth from where I started reading. I was disappointed.-17/70.

~*~Your Grammar and Spelling: It is, in a word, atrocious. You over-punctuate for emphasis, which looks very childish. You use "gurl", "gunna", "w/o", and various other phenomenons of the teenage Internet slang. It's appalling. Do you have a brain? Is it turned on? Or has your hamster fallen off its wheel and died? -3/10.

Extras:

Yes, you do. Some poetry, song lyrics--quite a few of which I actually know and like, unlike the typical lyrics page I stumble across--, rings, links. I like your collection of rings, especially. The "Shannon" diaryring? That's so cute!-10/10.

Will I Return?

...No. I'm sorry, but I won't. It was horribly boring for me.

Comments:

You seem like a nice girl, Shannon, if immature, confused, and a bit shallow. I'm sorry I had to be so harsh in this review, but I promised you honesty, and I've given it. However, as you seem to be a nice girl, I'm not going to put you in the Hall of Shame.

Total:54/200.

~*~Note:Shannon handled her poor review very gracefully and maturely, and let me a very polite note. For that, she gets her score doubled. Thanks for being a good sport, Shannon!

New Total: 108/200.

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