~*~Username and Title: When I was putting the pending list together after the influx of requests of which you unknowingly took part, I had my choice as to whom I could and would review. I opted to review you, because when I first took a look at your diary, I was already in love with your username, and I fell even more in love with the layout you had then. Now, I'm still in love, with said username, and your title is just very soft and Watery. I give you extra points for making me want to read your diary, based on your name alone! -8/5.

~*~Thoughts While The Page Was Loading: I want a taco. Yes, a taco sounds good. I wonder if this diary is going to be interesting and beautiful, or if it's going to be--holy Goddess, that's the most beautiful layout I've ever seen.-8/5.

The Starlit-Lily Factor:

~*~Does Your Soul Shine Through? I think so. You seem like a girl who, while somewhat wrapped up in your social life and in school--aren't most teenagers? You are a teenager, aren't you? I couldn't tell, as you didn't really have much biographical information--but your soul still seems to shine through. As Dahlia so beautifully put in her last review, it twinkles through. I'd say the same of you. You're a blend of the beautiful and profound, and the cheesy, cutesy and asinine. It's a fascinating dichotomy. -29/35.

~*~Are You Observant Of Beauty? Yes, you are. Your writing proves that. You cover a plethora of topics, all richly described, beautifully worded. If I were reading your work in my senior Advanced Placement English class, I would probably go nuts over your writing style, because your word choices, in the half of your diary that is serious writing, such as your poetry and stories, is beautiful beyond being beautiful. You talk about nature, about deep, emotional sensations and experiences, about spirituality and other such topics that make me almost giddy to see. I would worship you if you used this diary for nothing but your writing, however--it's almost ruined by the other garbage in there. -32/35.

Layout:

This layout is stunning. Simply put, it's stunning. The image is very soft and ethereal, and truthfully, it makes me want to dive into it. The color choices are amazing. I've really never seen a layout put together so well. The semi-opaque filter over the entry box is also beautiful, and, as I look at the image, the appropriate touch for readability, without marring the beauty of the image. I also love the link effects. I don't normally bother to see who the designer is beyond whether or not the diarist designed it themselves, but here, I have to give a huge thanks to Kat of DesignsByKat. That layout is amazing. -30/20.

Navigation:

Your navigation is small and a bit lost at the top of the entry box as it is, but the hover effects are beautiful, and very appropriate for the layout. They look like ocean foam on mouseover, which is great! I wish they were bigger, so I could see more of it. -8/10.

Content:

~*~Your Content: I read a lot. I don't remember just how much, and I'm not really in the mood to go back and check your archives to see which ones I really did read. I read enough to give you a fair review. That being said...

You almost have a split personality in your writing. It's fascinating to see. On one hand, you write these essays, and poems, and stories, short and long, with this incredibly mature, eloquent tone of voice that I adore. On the other hand, you do this daylogging stuff that, quite bluntly, makes me want to stab you with shrapnel. I'll adress the former type of writing first.

You write, so beautifully. I enjoyed reading your poetry, even if it was a little trite, and your stories, which were beautiful, and your poignant little essays. Your words are tender, emotional and passionate. There were a few times when I started reading an entry, and nearly found myself needing a tissue, because what I found was so heartbreakingly beautiful that I nearly cried. Your writing has the perfect balance of descriptiveness and actual flow to please even the toughest critics, I think. You would do really well to develop that talent, because, it is an enormous talent that you have, and it sparkles and gleams like a diamond in the rough.

On the other hand, your other personality was annoying in the extreme. I would honestly rather take one of the multitude of cutters in Diaryland than read a second more of your particular style of daylogging. You seem to be ridiculously, irritatingly fond of adding cutesy suffixes to every single word you write. You also use a plethora of Internet-actions in your entries, which irritates me even more. Your diary is not a chatroom. Do you hear me? Shall I get a brick and beat it into you? Do not use actions in your diary, particularly not if you've also got your writing in there, especially not if you've got your writing in the same entry, and Goddess help you not if you request a review from me! On the same topic, "noddles" is NOT a verb; "goshens" does not make the slang term "gosh" sound any less idiotic, "anyway" is not to be spoken as "anyways" and it's definitely not supposed to be spelled "aniwaez", and for the love of Goddess/God/Buddha/science, whatever you believe in, do NOT daylog in the same entry as one of your writing pieces! NO! It is evil! It makes your ENTIRE diary look utterly asinine, and furthermore, it's irritating and I want nothing more than to hurt you. Badly.

Nonetheless, your real writing is beautiful, so I won't maul your score too roughly. If your entire diary had been written that way, you would have gotten a near-perfect score, therefore, I'll give you exactly half.-35/70.

~*~Your Grammar and Spelling: Again, I'll give you half credit, because your writing was half beautiful, half hideous and childish. Ew, on the latter. -5/10.

Extras:
Not enough. You had some random quiz results, which were fun--I took a few of them myself! But I'd really like to see some biographical information, maybe a bit of organization for those quizzes, maybe a few other fun things. -7/10.

Will I Return?

I'm not sure. I'd say yes to one style of your writing, and hell no to the other.

Comments:

Fayes, I was very harsh on your daylogging, because it really just doesn't suit your diary, and it doesn't do any favors to your writing. Truthfully, it makes you look stupid, when your writing proves you're anything but. Do reconsider the purposes of this diary.

Total:162/200.

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