~*~Username and Title: Hmm. Your username strikes me as religious - something that I'm not all that into, but I support you if you are. It makes me think of someone who is at the end of their rope, faith-wise, and is just losing trust in God. I didn't really like it, actually. Your title's very depressing - it almost brings tears to my eyes. I love the wording, it makes me think of a poem I read long ago...-3/5.

~*~Thoughts While The Page Was Loading: Hmm, I'm hungry. I could use a sandwich. Whoa, small textbox. I need to adjust my screen settings. Intriguing picture, though. -4/5.

The Starlit-Lily Factor:

~*~Does Your Soul Shine Through? In truth, I do believe so. Your entries, while short, express an insane amount of emotion. I wouldn't think that six words would tell me so much, but they do. I imagine you sitting in front of your computer screen, letting these words just flow out of you. The way you write just makes me wonder about you. Inside. -32/35.

~*~Are You Observant Of Beauty? I hate to take off points here, but I feel like you don't. I adored reading your diary, but as I was going back and looking through it, I realized that most everything you write has a bit of an angsty quality to it - almost like complaints dressed up in gorgeous language. Make no mistake, I've felt this way, but it seems like none of your entries reflected on the sheer beauty of this world. Every once in a while, I'd see a little something that told me you were watching things around you and being grateful for them, but normally...no. So here's my advice to you: dance like no one's watching. Smell the flowers. Experience. -20/35.

Layout:

Which one? I saw about four in the process of reviewing your diary, and I read every entry. If this was Diaryland, I could attribute it to simple slow server-ness in changing it, but it's Diary-X. You pick the template you want to show up. I advise you to choose just one. It got distracting, seeing different templates with different entries. I definitely think that you should keep your archive and current templates the same. As for the current template - as I said, I had to adjust my screen, but something still looked a little off. Perhaps it was the links in the picture - they were a little hard to read. I adore the picture, though - it just makes me wonder. One more suggestion: don't make your short description red. It doesn't fit the layout at all. -15/20.

Navigation:

Too small. But easy enough. -8/10.

Content:

~*~Your Content: I read it all, and I have to say that I enjoyed every minute. "Beautiful complaints" is how I want to categorize your entries. You're not very happy...but then again, who is? Oftentimes, your words tugged at my heart. I'd read them and tears would spring to my eyes for no apparent reason. This entry especially made me think. I've found myself here so many times, looking for someone and just not being able to stop. As I was reading your diary, I wanted to rush up to you and give you a huge hug. I felt like a lot of the time, you needed one. As for missing Japan - I've been there (well, not Japan, but I've felt the missing ache.) The best advice I can give you is to look back on it with fondness. This was something I truly related to. A lot of the time, you would say things like that, and you didn't sound "preachy" so to speak. You just sounded like you didn't want others to make the same mistakes you had. I have to admit, the length of your entries left something to be desired. It left me craving a little more. Your diary was a bit like a drug - you just can't wait for that next fix. I was often left without closure at the end of an entry (what were you talking about here?). Sometimes, I wanted a little more explanation. I just needed that bit more. I think you should experiment with some longer entries in the future. But overall, I adored your diary. It was one of those diaries that just makes me think. -65/70.

~*~Your Grammar and Spelling: I wish you'd properly capitalize and puncuate everything. Or don't capitalize anything (but always use proper punctuation!) and go e.e. cummings on me. But do make up your mind.-5/10.

Extras:
You've got acres. I loved them all.-10/10.

Will I Return?

I rather think I will.

Comments:

You have lovely poetry.

Total:162/200.

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