~*~Username and Title: I'm sorry but I really dislike your user name and title. For one, the username made you yourself sound cold. Like you were icy and that wasn't a great first impression. And your title is just dreary and it adds on to that sentiment that you are dark and cold and you aren't a person to get close to. - -1/5.

~*~Thoughts While The Page Was Loading:My toes are cold and my computer is being weird. Great, another page with scrolls. -2/5.

The Starlit-Lily Factor:

~*~Does Your Soul Shine Through? I don't know how to answer this. Because you seem so downtrodden it's painful. If that is your soul shinning through, I'm sorry. It's dark and bleak and I wonder where you lost so much hope. But at the same time, you are being honest and that is what it's all about right? I don't have to agree with your opinions in order for you to voice them, as dark as they are. -25/35.

~*~Are You Observant Of Beauty? Not here you're not. You write about things that hurt you and things that upset you and that seems to be it. You write angry prose about how bad life is, but you don't go out there and try to live it, at least not that you write about. As I said before, it is all so dark, I'm sorry but I just could not find any observance of beauty anywhere. -10/35.

Layout:

Despite a little bit of scrolling, I did like your layout. The blue and black go really well together and the picture fits the mood/theme of your diary. -20/20.

Navigation:

All to the right in an organized column. -10/10.

Content:

~*~Your Content: I read all of your entries. From start to finish

Where do I start? As I said before you seem to harp on the bad things. You seem to me like a teenager so confused about where her life is going and what she should be doing and yet you don't take the time to really figure it out. You talk endlessly about how alone you feel and how unhappy you are and how sad you are. I'm sorry that you feel that way, but life isn't so one sided. Trust me, yes things do get bad but that isn't all there is to it.

But I did enjoy your prose and your poetry. The way you emphasised points with prose made it interesting and you are a talented writer as your stories show. I just wish you could see past the bleak 16 year old outlook on life. It's all a bit too angsty for me.-30/70.

~*~Your Grammar and Spelling: Nothing I could see, you're practically a grammer teacher with the way you write.-10/10.

Extras:
Your stories were amazing and your movie reviews were interesting if not laughable. -10/10.

Will I Return?

I'm sorry but no. I can't handle reading so much anger and so much hurt for so long.

Comments:

You are or at least you seem like an incredibly miserable person who cannot see outside of their own unhappiness. I feel for you because I've been there. But I grew out of it and I hope that you can too. Because right now you seem like every other angsty poetry writing 16 year old girl I have ever met. You get angry and you write about it and then you go off and hurt yourself only to repeat this vicious cycle over and over again. I'm sorry but I don't buy it. I've been there and I've been through it. There is more out there than you allow yourself to see, I feel sorry for that.

Total:118/200.

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