~*~Username and Title: This is one of the few times that something in either the title or the username hasn't even vaguely bothered me. Both are simple--elegant, almost, in their simplicity, and they imply a certain gentleness and eloquence. This is like the classical ballerina of titles, in my opinion. -7/5.

~*~Thoughts While The Page Was Loading: I hate NovaNet. My teacher is going to kill me when he looks at my records and notes how little time I've actually spent working this six weeks. Oh--oh no. To quote the lovely Minx whose commentary will be appearing from time to time in this review, "Not another whiny "Goth" wannabe."-2/5.

The Starlit-Lily Factor:

~*~Does Your Soul Shine Through? Shine is perhaps not the best word, unless one considers that you're not unlike a polished piece of onyx. You come across as being quiet, deeply and intensely emotional, and too young to really understand those emotions fully. And in a peculiar contrast, you seem very old. You make me think of very old little lady trapped in a very young body, which is somewhat amusing at times. You are also very, very negative, and alarmingly so for someone so young. So, to get back to the topic of whether you shine or not--no, you don't. You rather glower through. But your personality is definitely there.-29/35.

~*~Are You Observant Of Beauty? Hmm. I'm going to say no, and very strongly. You write beautifully, and the topics you cover in your poetry are beautiful, but that's just a mask over how you really feel. Just because you write beautifully does not mean you see the beauty. You mope and moan and whine about how miserably unpopular you are, how fat you are, how much everyone likes ____(Insert friend's name here) better than you, and you talk about cutting yourself, and about suicidal thoughts. You have no confidence in yourself at all, it seems, and because of that, I don't feel you really see the beauty in yourself, in those around you, or in the world. There is only the thinnest veneer of appreciation of nature, as seen in your poetry--but, I suspect that "appreciation" is there because you feel it should be there, under that context. Therefore, this is really the first time I've ever given this low a score in this section. -0/35.

Layout:

The layout is quite lovely. It's very simple and elegant, and I love the green on black. I also like the subtle shifting of hues upon mouseover of the links. The font is simple and attractive; the image quite lovely. It reminds me a bit of some of the photos in a number of Sarah Brightman albums, which is always a plus, because she's one of my favorite singers. Like many Diary-X users, I find that your layout is more attractive than those I've seen at Diaryland.-22/20.

Navigation:

I'm neutral on the navigation. It doesn't make me sigh with awe, or cringe with horror. There's nothing really wrong with it, aside from its lack of proper capitalization, but there's nothing spectacular about it, either. It's nice, neat and tidy.-8/10.

Content:

~*~Your Content: I read from the beginning to the end. That being said...

You have a beautiful, truly beautiful, way with words. I occasionally found myself tilting my head and wondering to myself if you were truly a twelve-year-old, because, as I mentioned previously, you seem remarkably like an old woman in a very young body. You have a fine sense of diction, without even considering that you are not a native to the English language. You write fluidly and elegantly, and after just a few entries, I had an immense respect for your writing. Your writing is a nice blend of the apparently unavoidable daylogging, poetry, songs, and thoughts on your life.

However, I was appalled. Yes, Gloria, I was appalled by some of the things in your diary. You're young. Yes, twelve is quite old by some standards; twelve definitely feels old. However, your cynical, self-demeaning, negative, jaded attitude is both inappropriate, and it comes off as not really being accurate. It seemed to me, in reading your diary, that you have absorbed this negative energy from others and have allowed it to affect and influence your own outlook on life. I was nothing short of shocked, and truthfully alarmed, when I read this entry. You cut your name on your skin, your beautiful young skin, because you saw your friend doing it? Are you a sheep or something? My question that I was asking the entire time I was reading your diary was, what has happened in your life that could make you hate your existence so much? Granted, I was pretty miserable when I was twelve going on thirteen myself, but I wasn't nearly as negative as you are.

Here's my advice, Gloria. Go see a doctor about how miserable you've been. Keep writing; you really do have a remarkable gift for that--better than the Jamie whom you envy and hate so much. And, most of all, open your eyes. Don't allow yourself to be so heavily influenced and tortured by the politics of your classmates. Rise above that, and you will be happy.

All in all, it was a good read. My heart goes out to you; as sensitive as you are, unless you learn to love yourself, you're going to have a difficult time growing up. -60/70.

~*~Your Grammar and Spelling: Absolutely beautiful. I saw quite literally no errors. I was in awe--if they were there, you hid them very, very well from me.-15/10.

Extras:
Quite a few! I enjoyed looking through them. I might well steal a few of yours for my own diary.-13/10.

Will I Return?

It's quite possible, because I'm concerned about you.

Comments:

The world's waiting for you, lovely Gloria. Tackle it and hug it--it's much more enjoyable that way.

Total:156/200.

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