~*~Username and Title:Hmm. I love the username. In truth I wish I had thought of it myself. It conveys a gust of originality, a lovely glimmer in the murkiness one often encounters in Diaryland. However, the title bothers me. Again, it's original, and I'll give you points for that, but the way it was set up annoys me. I'm a stickler for capitalization without the abuse of odd characters.-4/5.

~*~Thoughts While The Page Was Loading:White white white--ooooh, are those images for links?-5/5.

The Starlit-Lily Factor:

~*~Does Your Soul Shine Through?I...think so? I read quite a few entries, but your manner of writing and describing makes it somewhat difficult to see. I see your soul as being troubled, and perhaps outwardly somewhat calm, though inside there's a bloody awful lot of turmoil. You're strong, much stronger than most people who're suffering from clinical depression, and you're probably one of the few people who can admit to dwelling in darkness, to self-hatred--and still be somehow beautiful. Like a black rose. However--it was hard to tell who or what you are, in truth, though I read quite a lot. I just saw--a sea of turmoil, of confusion, of hurt, of needing to claw out at something--with which I can empathize.-27/35.

~*~Are You Observant Of Beauty? Yes, quite. You're an odd diamond, in that you can be miserable, be going through exquisite and unending pain, and still see beauty. There's a certain beauty in your usage of the language--I understand your major choice, for certain. You see beauty in nature, you see beauty in simple and eloquent things around you. I'm very much impressed, and pleased--because you seem to be aware that there's a light somewhere at the end of the tunnel.-33/35.

Layout:

Your layout was the source of much discussion between my significant other and myself. He liked the black boxes around the entry; I did not. In truth I really do rather like your layout; I like the concept of the contrast between the links and the red writing, and the black boxes. But the boxes somehow don't fit the delicacy of the images of the links. The colors go well together--and you used a particularly lovely shade of red; I have lipstick that color--but the chunky black boxes could be slimmed down a bit, perhaps. All in all, it's lovely--and the links are simply beautiful. I would like it very much, however, if your archives page followed the same layout, and if those boxes were smaller, a little more delicate in size. All in all, a nice package, and you get a few more points than I'd normally give a layout like this, because you designed it yourself. -16/20.

Navigation:

The images are beautiful. Is someone a fellow PhotoShop addict? I'm thinking very strongly of using images for a new layout for Incantata. The way you've organized them is also perfect; the placement is perfect, the color's perfect. Guess what that means? A perfect score here.-10/10.

Content:

~*~Your Content:I read from November--or was it October?--of 2003, until the present entry. That being said...

Your diary rather made my head spin. The way you write, your choice of words, of blending song lyrics into your thoughts till they run together like wept-upon ink, is not unlike looking into the mirror when I'm at my most distraught. Your diary seems to be a place where you can let the insanity free, where you can grasp at whatever you can hold onto, to keep yourself from shattering so badly you can't pick the pieces back up again. You aren't trying to get attention. You aren't trying to make people pity you. You just want to let it all go, to give yourself something resembling peace of mind.

That's really refreshing for a reviewer. I've read some diaries, both as a random visitor and as a reviewr that truthfully were the words of attention leeches. Yours does not come across that way, at all. You seem to be a girl who's genuinely hurting, who's struggling to find herself, who simply needs an outlet--and that's what your diary is.

You have an odd blend of a beautiful poetic-prose, and simple, flat speech. It's like you're veering back and forth like you're on a flat-plated mirror and you're being tilted up and down. It's dizzying, and honestly, often hard to follow. Also, your speech, even in that lovely poetic-prose, is disjointed, like you're just babbling, rambling, stumbling over yourself in your haste to scream it out of your system. I've been there before myself--though not like you.

Your worst problem, aside from your grammar (Which I will get to...), is your vagueness. You leave your reader in a fog, which tells me you don't write for anyone other than yourself. (Good for you.) However, as a reviewer, I found myself asking why you had asked for a review, because your diary's so personal I don't understand why you'd even care if someone stepped into your world.

All in all, not a bad read.-55/70.

~*~Your Grammar and Spelling: I imagine it's your "style" or something nonsense like that...but...your grammar is bloody awful. Your punctuation is atrocious, simply horrific, and your speech is punctuation with Cybenglish and shorthand. Though I'm not trying to step all over anyone's "style" that may be insulted here...I have to be honest. Your words are beautiful. Your ways of presenting them? Yeck.-2/10.

Extras:
Hmm. You have a random link to The Spark on your entry, and some other sundry things. Enough.-10/10.

Will I Return?

Mmm, meh. I can't mother all the depressed girls I review.

Comments:

I'm quite proud of you for being able to see the beauty in the world, in spite of your depression.

Total:162/200.

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